Is this clickbait?
First of all, @HiThere4 is my side account, so please don't accuse me of plagiarism. Secondly, as you could tell, this was originally written for a writing contest, but I liked the story so much that I wanted to revamp it. Which is number three: The reason I wanted to repost this, not edited nor reread, is that I wanted to rewrite it. I have a Wattpad account now, so I want to see what I could do with the story on there (I might even make it into a series). But why, you may be asking, are you sharing your old, cringey, eye-bleach worthy writing again? What do we have to do with it? Because I need help. If I want to rewrite this, I need to see ways I can improve it. And even though I can already see dozens of things to fix, a lot of things I can't find because I've read the story so many times. So I need a fresh pair of eyes to look at it. Tell me what you think I should fix, edit, add, take away, things like that. I will be staying relevant to the story, but I might change up the dialogue a bit, the order of events, things like that (The most change will be in the second part. I'll also add an epilogue so you could take a glance of how they end up after the story ends). So, to sum it up: -This is an old short story originally written for a contest on my side account. -I really like the story and think it has a lot of potentials. -I want to rewrite it. -I need help to what YOU think I should edit (I won't be taking all offers. I just need someone to help and offer suggestions in what they think needs editing. Think of it as if you were a critic) -Please comment on what you think needs to be changed/added/removed/edited (for example, "the story should have more emotion," "it should have less drama," "I think this one scene is too much," "I think this scene should be enhanced," and so on.) Thank you! <3
